I liked some parts in the second half, too. I just thought it could have flowed better, and been tied a little closer to the pace of the music. Also, to help keep things coherent, you might consider trying to tell a bit of a story with it, as well. The clips could have been grouped into themes, of sorts, that would then be put in order to follow each other in some sort of logical progression like:

-Girls in normal settings
-Girls encountering trouble/feeling down
-Girls struggling/fighting back
-Girls winning victory
-Girls at rest/peace

Honestly, it may not be a good idea for some videos, and it can always be overdone, but I think it helps in many of the other videos I have seen. Maybe it's just something to think about for the next one.